"Mommy Dearest"
Mommy dearest,
I'm sorry I didn't do well on the test
Mama dearest,
I tried my best, I promise
Mother dearest,
Please don't look at me like that,
It makes me sad.
Mommy dearest,
I'm sorry I'm so weak
Mother dearest,
I didn't mean to get so sick
Mother dearest,
You must be thirsty,
that's your fourth glass of wine
Mommy dearest,
Please stop yelling
Mama dearest,
The yelling makes it worse
Mother dearest,
I love you
Mommy dearest,
Do you love me?
This happens alot, i can totaly imagine everything with your descriptive words. Ah it was very very well done. Great job.
It reminds me alot of the book 'tigermom' alot.
This was a very original piece, it reached me well. not difficult, it's beautifully done.
Also You missed capitalizing a few letters, Your poem paints a beautiful picture of a child trying to please their mother with great difficulty.
You've acheived a new level of writing with this piece, It's something everyone could see, feel, and hear.
Wonderful job
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